Jasmine Hart

Thanks Dem, thanks Navita! You guys are so great. :)

Hi, I really enjoyed this. I love the opening; it was very fresh. The whole piece flows beautifully. I love;"Thick mud creeps between my toes". It's a great image. I ...

Hi, I like your use of couplets here, and this is written in a compelling style. I like "A dream with branches less whole than rot", and stanza two. I ...

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Eeek, two poems behind, need to get writing! X Finding a Way to Adjust I filled the bath this morning and sat on the edge with my hand over the ...

Hi, Welcome to Yws! I hope you like it here. I really love "with sea legs" and I think the last two lines are very effective. The way in which ...

Thanks Pen. Wow, it makes me so happy to hear you say that! I've never actually seen people fishing, so I'm glad I could describe it in such a way ...

Thanks Navita! VII Communication "Sorry, I'm lost, can you help me please?" The words sound ok when I try them out. The land, it seems, is quieter than the seas. ...

The writings, but the community would be my second choice. :)

Hi, Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. I think this is a powerful piece and I love your contrasting images. I especially love; "Underneath those pretty nails, ...

Hi, Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. I think the rhythm works nicely and this progresses nicely from beginning to end. I really like; "But please don't ...

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Hey :) Poem One: I'll admit I didn't like this one much. I thought the first line was good, but I thought "So similar, so different, walking and driving and ...

Poem V First Encounter "What do you want, girl? Your eyes keep darting, your steps are uncertain I can see rivulets of sweat glistening on your skin and your palms ...

Poem IV Venturing Outside I dislike wearing shoes. My toes spread too much, they do not like being pressed together and would rather kick and flick than trudge trudge trudge. ...